Now...
Everything has been said
A big rock has been lifted
and thrown away
Those sharp,
small stones
have been moved
to another spot
The old pains
have been released
...a little
The aches are leaving
...a bit
The thick white fog
is clearing up
...slowly
Now...
here we are
facing each other's image
looking through
a transparent glass
gazing at each other's eyes
standing...
you before me
watching every detail
of each other's face
Now...
there's a pinch of relief
there's a lighter feeling
but
the numb somehow stays
the hole is still opened
the doubt is still there
Now...
no one moves
nobody talks
no words
no acts
not even a sound of breath
Darn silence
I loathe you
Helplessness
leave me!
Someone's gotta
.....move
.....write
write something
use that old black pen
No!!
no more writing
say something!
reach the old-new spontaneous thing
break..
break it
The silence
Now!
6 comments:
Gracias, RinAku.
I like your newest poem. Although it is bold and perhaps rashly considered, it is fresh, like an open wound and daring. Precise and demanding. I enjoy the first half the most, but respect the second half, as I, too, have been prone to ill-advised writings and "No!" threats from my stronger conscience.
Wow! So intense, what else can I say? I like the commanding tone and for once in a long, long time I hear something so decisive that it is really so refreshing for me. Cheers!
Thanks "telescopic_viewpoint".
This poem is a relection of the feelings and thoughts going on in my mind. Everything was still fresh. That's why it sounds bold and rashly considered to you. I just had to express it all.
Thank You "aquarius" :)
You're right. It's intense. So many things going on in mind. I wasn't sure of what to do and what to expect, but suddenly felt like I just had to do something. That's where the commanding tone came from.
I agree with Aquarius, it is "intense"
I enjoyed the poem before this one *sigh*
You've got an amazing talent Rin (i'm not just saying that, trust me!)
Can't wait to read more!! I'm hooked! :D
Now..
It's just a hollowness
That you might feel
Now..
It's just a nothingness
That surrounds you
Now..
It's just a deep loneliness
That attacks you
But..
Everybody has been there
And they survived
So you will
Tabah, tabah..
Thanks "La!"
I know. Aku bakal survive. Pasti! Kita berdua ini kan tipe survivor :)
Aku selalu tabah, kok ^__+
You know.
Hi *~$&!~* !
Thanks for visiting my blog again. Thank you for the compliment, too :)
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